The repetition of the "she' pronoun kinda bugged me but the flow was good so I kept rolling with it. Still, I think this could be worked on a bit replacing it with the woman, the mom, etc.
Thanks for the read !
And while we're on the topic of The Eye, I'm pretty sure it had a remake starring Jessica Alaba, and something like two sequels. Also, in V/H/S 2 (or S-VHS) there's a segment where a man gets new bionic eyes because he was blind or something and also begins to see ghosts. Just throught thi was worth the heads-up.